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"Hello little suicide,
What are you doing up?
Making one more red line?
Making one more cut?
What do you think it will prove,
When you're all scarred in the end?
Do you think that'll give God a reason,
To let your spirit mend?"

"Hello silent angel,
Do you know of what you speak?
Do you see the pretty suicide,
Lying at your feet?
Your lack of words is killing,
All she had left inside.
She's falling more than ever,
That little suicide."

"Sorry little sufferer,
I can not ease your pain.
Please put down the razor,
With the crimson colored stain.
The night shall bring you shelter,
Your dreams will grant you peace.
The only gifts I offer,
To help your soul release."

"It's over petty angel.
There's nothing left to say.
My tears were left unnoticed,
Now there's a price to pay.
Don't say another word now,
It's time for me to die.
There's no way you can save me.
I'm just a suicide."
©2007-2009 ~artificialBLISS420
:iconartificialbliss420:

Author's Comments

So I may have been a little messed up when I wrote this, but here's the idea; The first stanza is supposed to be an Angel, talking to a girl who's about to kill herself. The second stanza is Death, talking to the angel. The third stanza is the Angel again. And the last stanza is the suicidal girl.

yea.... I don't even know....

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:iconpandastalker:
No it makes sense. lol Awesome! :hug:

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There is no greater pain than to remember, in our present grief, past happiness
:iconartificialbliss420:
:hug: Thanks

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I will not go slowly to my grave. I’m going full throttle, skidding in sideways with a beer in one hand and a hot chick in the other screaming, “SWEET BABY JESUS, WHAT A RIDE!”
:iconcpcloud:
whao thats really good ^-^

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*falls on floor* i wanna die..... so i can see Sebastian again...... but i want to live.... for the few that want me to, i dont know who in the right mind would...... but.....
:iconiwantthestars:
wow this poem is really amazing

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"sex disguised as love
and
love disguised as sex"
(Thanks to Rebel2206 for the avi!)
:iconiwantthestars:
just read it again, still awesome. i really like it

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"sex disguised as love
and
love disguised as sex"
(Thanks to Rebel2206 for the avi!)

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